Tuesday, June 5, 2012

Love at First Sight

Lillie McFerrin, Ruth Long and Janelle of Me and Mia have teamed up for a wonderful June blog hop:  Forbidden love.  We were supposed to think star-crossed lovers, but this is the story that came out.  I don't think it's right for the contest but I just loved it and since it actually got a thumbs-up from my daughter as well (my first from her!), I decided to put it up as a  non-entry.  
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Love at First Sight

I saw her as I walked down Main Street. Her prim dress and apron pressed to perfection, her raven ringlets and china blue eyes calling to me.  And I stood there on Main Street staring at her, like I hadn’t any manners at all. But she was so very lovely.

Mother says she is far too rich for us, but her face is not haughty or proud. Maybe one day, she will have tea with me. I’d put on my very best Sunday clothes, the ones without patches, and we’d laugh and talk. Perhaps she’d even introduce me to the Queen.  I figure a lady as fine as her must know the Queen.

Then, she would come home with me.  She could sleep upon my bed and I’d give her my goose-down pillow to lie upon.  I’d brush her black hair until it shone, tying it up in colorful ribbons with a different color for each day of the week.

She has a peaceful kind of face. One you could drop your troubles into. When my days are heavy, she’ll sit in my lap and smile patiently as I tell her all about it.  Then, she’ll whisper glorious tales of faraway princesses and their adventures.

On holidays, I’ll take her down Main Street in my wagon, perched on fresh cut hay and flower petals and Grandma’s best quilt so everyone could see she’s mine.

I pull my nose from the foggy glass though I can't tear my eyes from hers. And I keep watching ‘til I can’t see her anymore as we walk away from Robertson’s Toy Store.  Tucking my hand into Mother’s, I say, “Then, do you think Santa could bring her for me?”

“I don’t think elves make dolls like that, Lisbeth.”
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So can you relate with this kind of forbidden love?  Leave me your comments/stories below. Love to hear em.

6 comments:

  1. Oh so much! Am I right in thinking there is a hint of Amish in here? Their children weren't allowed to have dolls with faces because of the "no graven images" commandment.
    That is so sweet and sad. I'm going to say that she did get it.

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  2. This is such an imaginative take on Forbidden Love - wonderful! You've got the voice just to perfection - the childishness and the passion that kids get about an object of desire. Why a non-entry? It's fab! Make it real! Love the Amish hint - I didn't know about that, it adds an interesting dimension.

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  3. Well if you read Lillie's site, she says think Romeo and Juliet, so this may be a stretch for the blog hop. But I loved writing it so its here on my blog anyhow. I will write something closer to the prompt this weekend.

    As for the Amish.. any hint of Amish was done completely unintentionally but if that's what readers come up with.. I'm not going to gainsay anyone LOL... :D

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  4. So heartfelt...I remember falling for a specific beautiful doll, which I did get in the end, but I hardly dared play with her, so she just sat watching everything looking pretty!

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  5. I think you should enter this;not all forbidden loves have to have the Romeo and Juliet angle. My favourite line is 'One oyu could drop your troubles into.' I had a doll that I spoke to all the time and loved her. xxx

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